Thursday, February 16, 2006

Whispers outside my window

A mourning dove coos
from a treetop perch unseen
breeze rustles the pines


Anonymous said...

It's very short but a rich poem.

Michael said...

Domo sumimasen, Miki-san! I didn't like the first version of this poem that I posted Thursday afternoon, so I rewrote it and retitled it. I like this one much better.

Oxeye said...

No jacket today
But tomorrow much colder
sparrow doesn't care

Michael said...

Nice one, Oxeye! ;)

Anonymous said...

I agree with you. This version is much better.

anu said...

lovely poem Michael

I loved this sentence :from a treetop perch unseen

So beautiful...and how often i hve heard the bird but could not see it.

Michael said...

Hi Miki,

Yes, I didn't like the first version at all. Thanks for your comment!

As ever, Anu, thank you!

LBseahag said...

Lucky you!

Here's mine:

Skyscraper called home
A helicopter flies by
To keep the sea safe

That was a first!!! woo hoo!

Michael said...

Hey LB, that was great!!
Haiku and senryu (same 5-7-5 syllable arrangement as haiku, but a poem about human nature) can be great fun!

LBseahag said...

I am gonna have to go practice those!!
btw...I have a photo for you on my blog today ;)

Michael said...

Hey LB,

I'm fixin' to visit your blog right now.